Wednesday 7 April 2010

Tension (Part 6)

January 23rd, 2010
Saturday
Chennai, India

Meenakshi woke up and looked at the clock, yawning. 8 am. That boy Ramesh would be arriving at 10 am. She went and had a bath, came back and carefully tied a deep red saree. She plaited her hair and placed a bunch of malli-poo (jasmine flower) on it. Skilfully, she lined her eyes with eye-liner and placed a new pottu on her forehead. Looking at the mirror, she practised a smile.

At 9:30 am, she went out to have breakfast and was greeted by her father’s approving smile at her dress. As she was finishing her breakfast, at 9:55 am, she heard a motor-bike’s roar. “That must be Ramesh – how curious that he should come to see me in a motor-bike”, she thought. Cautiously, she got up and went to look out of the window.

There was a young man. He took off his helmet and ran his fingers through it. Meenakshi squinted. Wait a minute. That wasn’t Ramesh. She was almost sure it was Philip. What was he doing here? “Oh my God, it is Philip!”, she thought fearfully as he walked up to the door beaming. Dr. Narayan opened the door and greeted Philip, asking him inside. Meenakshi was confused. Incredulously, she looked from Philip to her father and her father to Philip. Both of them were smiling widely.

“Meenakshi, this is the boy I want you to marry”, announced Dr. Narayan.

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5 comments:

  1. andronicus15 April 2010 at 22:46

    Hey nice read Nitin.. My comments :)

    1. Nice observation on the christian upbringing and brahmin upbringing. I think it's quite true.
    2. Liked your touch of indian english words. Made for a very comfortable read :)
    3. Part 5 is typical Jeffrey Archer / Sidney Sheldon style ;) hehe.. nice..
    4. nice characters.. wish there was a father like Dr Narayan that everywhere..
    5. Good setting. Although the theme is an old one. I think the setting is quite contemporary something I related to with ease..

    Great going.. :)

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  2. Nitin16 April 2010 at 02:13

    thanks da, that's useful feedback :)

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  3. Sureshkumar R16 April 2010 at 04:54

    That was a nice read buddy !! A pleasant one :) ..

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  4. ravi17 April 2010 at 06:38

    Hello Buddy

    I really enjoyed reading the story and was amazed to know that you have become a good writer and you made it very simple to read and understand and public will definitely love it. Its kinda of last novel by Chetan Bhagat and you are the next to him..Good.

    So what you upto nowadays . Hope you know that i got married last november and check out my album in orkut or facebook.Please reply back in
    ravi.kedia@limtexit.com. I will check other aritcles very soon.Start Publishing short stories printed. Wish you all the best.

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  5. Nitin17 April 2010 at 09:46

    thanks Ravi....hope you're enjoying married life :)...happy for you...

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